Topic-3 (Hindi/English)

                                 change-your-thoughts

Change your thoughts & you change your world .

सोच बदलिये , आपकी दुनिया बदल जाएगी |

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    • Hi Sachin!
      The starting of the essay with a story is good. In the beginning, your writing was well close to the topic but somehow in between you lost track and your essay went haywire.
      The essay asked about how a change in someone’s thought could change someone’s world. If you had quoted a few more examples to assert this statement, it would have been better.
      Also, You didn’t end your essay properly. It gives it an impression of the essay being half baked. Conclusion could have been better.
      Rest all are fine. Keep practising. You’ll do good. 🙂

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